I feel like I've commented on the genius of your line breaks before, but "I stumbled on the journey, Lord: you caught me" is phenomenal. Makes the reader stumble into the realization that God caught you "across the shins." Well done.
Thank you! I wasn’t actually sure that I was going to manage a full poem from the idea I jotted down, but once “across the shins” happened, I had to make the rest happen. Took several drafts.
I feel like I've commented on the genius of your line breaks before, but "I stumbled on the journey, Lord: you caught me" is phenomenal. Makes the reader stumble into the realization that God caught you "across the shins." Well done.
Thank you! I wasn’t actually sure that I was going to manage a full poem from the idea I jotted down, but once “across the shins” happened, I had to make the rest happen. Took several drafts.
Kate it is a fine word, and broken into its two phonemes at least points the reader to crystalline grandeur.
Agreed! And even the sound alone suggests (to me, at least) grandeur and ornamentation. I just didn’t want to trip people up with it.
Man, I wish we got these serendipitous words shoved our direction from the rhyming dictionary more often! It would make life easier.
Alas, the fifteen-minute struggle to make a rhyme rhyme that doesn't want to ain't going anywhere.
Beautiful poem. I think I'll pray this tonight before climbing 'twixt the sheets. (: